(For those unfamiliar with the format, an 'etheree' consists of ten lines starting one syllable and increasing the line syllable count by one with each new line, i.e. 1 syllable / 2 syllables / 3 etc. etc.. My 'Demi Etheree' variation flips midway through such that the 6th line is also 5 syllables, the 7th line is 4, the 8th 3 and so forth.)
Since you didn't provide a new poem with your answer, I will — so very graciously! ;o) — take up the slack with another of my own poems. Name this format too?
Re: Say, Syllables
Date: 2014-02-27 11:23 am (UTC)(For those unfamiliar with the format, an 'etheree' consists of ten lines starting one syllable and increasing the line syllable count by one with each new line, i.e. 1 syllable / 2 syllables / 3 etc. etc.. My 'Demi Etheree' variation flips midway through such that the 6th line is also 5 syllables, the 7th line is 4, the 8th 3 and so forth.)
Since you didn't provide a new poem with your answer, I will — so very graciously! ;o) — take up the slack with another of my own poems. Name this format too?
Original Debt
you cannot repay the dead in kind
the scale is skewed, the coin surmised
the past changes only in the mind
and generations strived and twined
their lives and hopes before you could rise
you cannot repay your birth in kind
and though you search into what's behind
frame and reframe and analyze
the past changes only in the mind
and done is fixed whether it's maligned
or praised, so perhaps this comprise:
you cannot repay the past in kind
but present need and future undefined
call out: here your coin is good (and wise)
where past changes only in the mind
in present's flux your window lies
do unto future the best the past supplies
for you can't repay the past in kind
the past changes only in the mind