LizJJ Jam: "that time you nicked my penny for your plots"

[untonuggan]

Apologies for the service delay! Those of you who guessed that I started the last poem, sacrificia, were correct!

This next poem was started from the last line first, switching off lines. I *may* have added two lines here and there as I got overwhelmed by the creative impulse, but it sorted itself out. If you've never written a poem backwards, I highly recommend it as a format. If you've never written a poem backwards with another person, I recommend that as well.

You are welcome to steal our first/last line: "and all that for a ha'penny" - or come up with something of your own. We'd love to see the output of your creative endeavors sometime, particularly at the Sunday Picnic! I dare you...

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that time you nicked my penny for your plots

at first the day ballooned with sharp words, but
I couldn't win against your mock solemnity

we laughed through the ferris wheel
circling around each others' hands,
until the sun's last cheerful hurrah saw us

finished at the fair, exhausted and spent
fingers sticky with cotton candy --
and all that for a ha'penny.

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Poll #12636

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I would like to leave kudos for this poem

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Yes
7 (100.0%)

No
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I'm thinking of writing a backwards poem for the Sunday Picnic!

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Yes
1 (11.1%)

Maybe So
5 (55.6%)

Nope
0 (0.0%)

Some other time perhaps
3 (33.3%)

Every poll needs a duck!
4 (44.4%)

Comments

[lynnoconnacht]

Ooooh. That's lovely! It's very sweet. I love how well it says everything whilst saying so little. It's got a great scope for the reader to fill in and it just enriches the piece. <3

[untonuggan]

Thank you! It was very, very tempting to keep going but both jjhunter and I felt that it was done...short and simple, as you said.

[raze]

Ooh, I like this! I have way too much childhood nostalgia about fairs/carnivals/etc. not to.

[untonuggan]

Thank you! :D