Mmmm... I'm wondering if the plosive in 'hurtle' it a bit too strong in relation to the others in that stanza?
That said, though, there's such a wealth of ways you can interpret this poem and I love the ending, as fyreharper said. That pointing out that even if we hold completely still we're still moving as part of this intricate everything. That's gorgeous.
Although I think my favourite line is "while chain the carbons breathed by leaves". I love the way it sounds. <3 It dances in its own right.
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Date: 2013-02-20 11:45 am (UTC)That said, though, there's such a wealth of ways you can interpret this poem and I love the ending, as
Although I think my favourite line is "while chain the carbons breathed by leaves". I love the way it sounds. <3 It dances in its own right.