The Triquint

[ariestess]

As you can probably guess by now, based on the poem forms that I'm sharing this week, I have a lot of fun with poems that rely on word or syllable counts. There's a challenge to the syllable and word counts that fascinates me, but rhyme structure doesn't. I don't quite understand it, but that's how I roll. *g*

So today we're looking at the triquint. According to the Shadow Poetry site, this form works in the following way ::

Triquint, a poem for created by Sylvia A. Feeley, which consists of 3 verses, 5 lines each. Lines 3 and 4 of verse 1 (Refrain) repeat in verses 2 and 3. The syllable count for each stanza is 9, 7, 5, 3, 1 and has an aaAAb rhyme scheme.

I will say that when I wrote the poem below, I actually fought with it to get this done, particularly because of the rhyme scheme. But I persevered, and have found this to be a form that I want to explore more in the future, despite the rhyming. LOL!


"cats"

life with four feline masters is rough,
interestingly enough.
time to call their bluff,
grab some scruff.
split!

just letting them sleep with me is tough,
i cannot sleep in the buff!
time to call their bluff,
grab some scruff.
quit!

cannot eat pizza or a cream puff,
gabe just tries to eat the stuff.
time to call their bluff,
grab some scruff.
shit!

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[lilmoka]

Perfect summary of life with cats. Except for the fact that mine prefer plum cakes to pizza ;D

[ariestess]

LOL! My younger boy Gabe [see icon] will eat pretty much ANY human food. One of his favorites is shatterpath's buttercream icing with alcohol in it. And, for the record, he gets a TINY pea-sized amount when he does get any. That boy is like a dog that will eat anything, despite being a cat... LOL!

[alee_grrl]

What an interesting form. Would be quite a challenge to meet the requirements (syllable/word counts, plus rhyme scheme, plus repeating lines). I enjoyed your "Cats" poem. It made me giggle, and reminded me of many of the cats I know.

[ariestess]

It was definitely a challenge to write it, but it's one of the few times I didn't necessarily mind the "forced" rhyming.

And yeah, I giggle every time I re-read this one.

[lynnoconnacht]

*laughs and applauds* Oh, cats... I agree with lilmoka. This is a perfect summary of life with cats. (There's a reason they're banned from my bedroom when it's my bedtime.)

That form looks really, really challenging, though. Fun but challenging... (I'm not a fan of poetry that has rhyme schemes myself, either. Well, of writing it anyway. ^-~)

[ariestess]

*nods* For the most part, I run screaming from forced rhyming schemes in poetry [and most of the metred feet, to be totally honest], but I kind of like this one. I don't know how often I'll actually use this form, but I did enjoy this particular poem...

[raze]

Cracking up over here. Our cats are just beyond awful and "shit!" about describes how I feel living with them 90% of the time.

Great job tacking the challenge of this ryme scheme, at any rate; I joined this comm mostly to be wildly impressed by other people's poetry as I'm awful at it myself, and so far I have not been let down.

[ariestess]

Thanks!

[lynnoconnacht]

I quite understand! (I run away from all the metred feet, though. I have no sense for rhythm.)

Maybe there's a way to adapt the form to suit your tastes and style more? That is, if you like it enough overall to poke at it until you feel happy with it. Otherwise there isn't a point in trying to poke it into something that lets you write more/better poems. ^-~ *rambles*

[ariestess]

Actually, I usually run from all of the metred feet, too. I'm not sure why I said some...