>> Ha! I love how much personality comes through here, how rooted we are in Fiorenza's perspective and her knowing judgements ('all too often', 'impertinent').<<
Yay! I'm glad this worked for you.
>> This is a lovely piece, and I'll definitely make the time at some point to go check out the rest of the cycle to date.<<
Some of the subsequent poems do indeed give examples of the village louts doing various foolish things, and Fiorenza gradually growing into her role.
>>Quick admin note: when posting a poem longer than thirty lines, please pick a cutoff point (say, whichever stanza ends closest to the 30th line) and stick the rest under a cut tag.<<
Alas, I can't do that myself; I'll have to send the longer poems for you to post. Computers sometimes do screwy things around me, and one of those is that the DW cut function refuses to work for me, no matter what I try with it.
Let's see, the next three are under 30 lines, then a long one, a short one, and finally a long one at the end of the week. So there are two you'll need to cut-tag for me.
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Thank you!
Date: 2011-10-11 05:05 am (UTC)Yay! I'm glad this worked for you.
>> This is a lovely piece, and I'll definitely make the time at some point to go check out the rest of the cycle to date.<<
Some of the subsequent poems do indeed give examples of the village louts doing various foolish things, and Fiorenza gradually growing into her role.
>>Quick admin note: when posting a poem longer than thirty lines, please pick a cutoff point (say, whichever stanza ends closest to the 30th line) and stick the rest under a cut tag.<<
Alas, I can't do that myself; I'll have to send the longer poems for you to post. Computers sometimes do screwy things around me, and one of those is that the DW cut function refuses to work for me, no matter what I try with it.
Let's see, the next three are under 30 lines, then a long one, a short one, and finally a long one at the end of the week. So there are two you'll need to cut-tag for me.