Wow, I love that first poem! Each section has a wonderful and individual impact.
I agree that the second poem could use a little clarity regarding the setting, but I do love that second half. To me, it seems to simultaneously undermine and support the somewhat romantic bent of the first half.
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Date: 2013-09-13 05:29 am (UTC)I agree that the second poem could use a little clarity regarding the setting, but I do love that second half. To me, it seems to simultaneously undermine and support the somewhat romantic bent of the first half.