jjhunter: A sheep with shaded glasses and a straw hat lies on its side; overhead floats the pun 'on the lamb' (as in baby sheep). (on the lamb)
jjhunter ([personal profile] jjhunter) wrote in [community profile] poetree 2013-06-18 07:37 pm (UTC)

24 says: "Beautifully said!"

24 says: "Around the middle both sonnets shifted from each line being written by one person to individuals writing two (MU) or three (Hello, Trolley) lines at a time. Part of what may have made MU hang together better is that we were pressed for time to finish yesterday, so [personal profile] primeideal and I alternated twice."

24 writes down author numbers as follows:
(41) I study you, re-view, learn one fact more
(28) Geology of body, face, and time
(35) Show twisted veins of life's remember'd ore
(34) Recalled as gold, no longer worth a dime
(40) Tis trash or treasure, turning with the tide
(24) and trash to treasure turns the Midas eye
(41) Until what has been thrown away outside
(41) Becomes engulfed, and gleaming troughs rise high
(24) So furrowed brows relax into delight
(24) And arms unfolded show beneath your skin
(41) What's drifting downwards, what had been uptight
(41) Now lapping back, looped deeper, found within
(16) All life is change, as all that grows is changed
(16) Light glinting from perspectives rearranged

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