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jjhunter ([personal profile] jjhunter) wrote in [community profile] poetree 2011-10-11 04:35 am (UTC)

Fiorenza looked at the young men of her village,
whose bloody noses she stanched after fights
and whom she had treated for hangovers all too often
and who asked impertinent, urgent questions about
how not to get a baby on a girl they wouldn't marry.


Ha! I love how much personality comes through here, how rooted we are in Fiorenza's perspective and her knowing judgements ('all too often', 'impertinent'). This is a lovely piece, and I'll definitely make the time at some point to go check out the rest of the cycle to date.

Quick admin note: when posting a poem longer than thirty lines, please pick a cutoff point (say, whichever stanza ends closest to the 30th line) and stick the rest under a cut tag. It helps with navigation when one is reading off a Reading Page or scrolling through comm back entries. Thanks!

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