peel your clementines
like compass stars, and your trash
will bloom orange suns
silver and gold diadems
abandoned, tarnish and fade
while plastic wrappers
float on distant seas, tawdry
amidst glass lures, forgotten
in the ocean's lulling waves
the global local
the distant piscine choking
on our convenience
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Some starting places for discussion:
If this poem was written by three writers instead of two, and you were the third writer, what alternative third stanza might you write in place of 'while plastic wrappers...', etc.? Where do you think the new poem might go from there?
Does this feel like a cohesive poem, or a collection of disparate images? Are there particular key words or concepts that link two or more stanzas together?
Have you ever participated in writing haikai or other collaborative poetry yourself? How is it different from writing poetry on your own?
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